The pie chart shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the global
degradation
of agricultural
land
worldwide which was driven by three main factors. The table shows the three affected
regions
by the causes in the 1990s. When considered together, there is no correlation between the two sets of data. Globally, there are four main causes of unproductive
land
, including overgrazing at 35%,
deforestation
at 30%,
overcultivation
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over-cultivation
over cultivation
at 28%, and
other factor
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at 7%.
However
, these four factors do not directly
affected
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the
land
in the three
regions
. First,
land
degradation
was caused by different factors in some
regions
. In Europe,
deforestation
was the leading factor responsible for the total
land
degraded at 23% with 9.8%
deforestation
, followed by over-cultivation at 7.7%, and over-grazing had a small contribution at 5.5%. In Oceania, over-grazing was the most significant cause of
land
degradation
, affecting by11.3%,
while
deforestation
had a minor impact at 1.7%. Over-cultivation did not contribute to
land
degradation
in
this
region, resulting in a total
degradation
of 13%. North America had less unproductive
land
with a total of 5%. Over-cultivation had the largest impact at 3.3%,
while
over-grazing caused 1.5%, and
deforestation
was less significant at 0.2% of
degradation
.
Overall
, over-grazing and
deforestation
were the leading causes of
land
degradation
globally, but have varied significantly across different
regions
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degradation, land, regions, deforestation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural land
  • productivity
  • geographical focus
  • leading causes
  • diminished
  • significant factors
  • impact
  • prevalent
  • statistics
  • trend
  • usage
  • unexpected findings
  • agricultural practices
  • environmental conditions
  • pie chart
  • table
  • regions
  • 1990s
  • summarize
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
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