the line graph show the prison population in a european country from 1911 to 2001

the line graph show the prison population in a european

 country from 1911 to 2001
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male and female prisoners from 1911 to 2001
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a prison in a European country.
Overall
a contrasting trend in the
number
of prisoners can be observed in the graphs.
While
the highest
number
came from males,
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can be seen in females showing
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decrease in the given years. Turning to details, the male prisoner population underwent significant fluctuations over the period. It commenced at approximately 20,000 in 1911 and remained relatively stable until 1921.. In 1931, the
number
dropped to approximately 10,000 and saw
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rise in 1941.Before recovering to 20.000 the figure experienced consistent stability till 1971, after which it rose gradually to 40,000 in 1981. After that, the
number
sharply rose before
finally
peaking at 45,000 in 2001.
In contrast
, the female prisoner population exhibited a consistently downward trend. Starting at approximately 3,200 in 1911, it declined to around 2,800 by 1921.
This
gradual decrease continued for the next two decades, reaching a low of approximately 400 in 1941. A slight recovery occurred in the following two decades, with the population rising to around 1,500 in 1961. In 1971 ,the figure fell to approximately 800,after which the figure
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rose
raised
to about 1800 in 1991 and 1900 in 2001.
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