Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

When city
adminitration
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administration
develop
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develops
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better
transformation
systems and the prices of public
transformation
is
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are
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decreased,
transport
pollution
will
dramaticaly
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dramatically
reduce
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reduced
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. People will start to
use
public
transformation
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transportation
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more
common
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commonly
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, for
economical
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economic
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reasons and
time
management in traffic. I strongly believe that, when they begin to
use
public
vechiles
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vehicles
,
transport
pollution
will decrease automatically,
becuase
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because
users will not drive their own cars. In
this
essay
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essay,
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It will be argued
that
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apply
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how people can
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be encourge
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encourge
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encouraged
to start to
use
public
transformation
, in order to reduce
pollution
. With the economical aspect, for individuals using their own car is overpriced. Fuel is not
only
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the only
an only
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outcome,
maintaince
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maintenance
costs and parking costs are
also
huge
drwabacks
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drawbacks
drawback
of using
own
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your own
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car.
While
public
transportation
costs cheap enough, passengers can consider using it,
instead
of their private cars.
For instance
, I
use
public
transformation
to avoid
cost
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the cost
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of my car. Nowadays
time
is a heated
thema
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them
for individuals, who want to
use
all the minutes efficiently. Especially in rush hours problem getting bigger. When
city
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a city
the city
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has a good
transportation
system, which
help
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helps
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to manage
time
, passengers will tend to
use
public
transportation
. Having an efficient route
of
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for
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busses or metros,
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and reduce
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reduce
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reducing
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the delaying
time
for
vechiles
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vehicles
can be
benefical
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beneficial
examples for
enhance
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enhancing
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the
transformation
systems.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
while
using public
transport
passengers can find
time
for themselves,
such
as reading
book
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books
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or
do
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doing
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researchs
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research
.
For instance
, I read 1 book every month thanks to public
transportation
.
To sum up
, finance and
time
management is the most efficient method to
encouruge
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encourage
using public
vechiles
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vehicles
, which will lead to decreasing
transport
pollution
.
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