The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram exemplifies the process of manufacturing a biofuel named ethanol and its production stages.
Overall
, from the data given, it is evident that
this
procedure contains 10 recursive phases, which commence with planting and growing trees, by humans , and conclude with absorption of energy ,
such
as sunlight and carbon dioxide , by these trees.
Firstly
, seeds are planted and taken care of, until they become a mature tree , ready to receive atmospherical energies ,
such
as sunlight and carbon dioxide.
Then
they save
this
energy internally , before being harvested by industrial machines.
Moreover
, the logs are transported to a factory to be pre-processed , in order to extract the cellulose out of them.
Nonetheless
, the material extracted is
then
processed in a lab to obtain sugar compounds whilst microbes are added , making up ethanol. Regarding the output, it is consumed in the transport section by cars, trucks or even aeroplanes, and
as a result
of their ignition process, they release carbon dioxide in the air , which
then
is returned to the manufacturing process of ethanol by being absorbed by jungles.
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  • procurement
  • raw materials
  • milled
  • surface area
  • fermentable substance
  • enzymes
  • yeast
  • fermentation
  • byproducts
  • isolate
  • purified
  • distillation
  • concentration
  • containers
  • distribution
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