The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how much male and female population was undertaking their
further
education
as full-time and part-time, during three different time periods: 1970/71, 1980/81, and 1990/91. The number of people
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depicted in thousands.
Overall
, the majority of both genders preferred part-time
education
throughout the time frame. The statistics of
men
participating in part-time
education
showed a variable trend,
however
on the other hand
, the data depicting
men
in full-time programs, and women in both full-time and part-time programmes showed a gradual increase in numbers. In 1970/71, one million
men
were enrolled in part-time courses, which was the highest
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among
men
. After a decade, the numbers decreased to about 850,000, followed by a slight rise in the next decade, reaching
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nearly 900,000 in 1990/91.
In contrast
, only about 100,000 people preferred full-time
education
in 1970/71.
However
, there was a gradual rise in the following years with about 150,000
men
in 1980/81, and 250,000
men
in 1990/91.
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, in 1970/71, the number of women enrolled in full-time and part-time programs was around 75,000 and 750,000 respectively, which was much lower than
men
.
Nevertheless
, there was a substantial rise throughout the years, with 800,000 females in part-time and 200,000 females in full-time programmes in 1980/81, and 1.1 million and 250,000 in 1990/91. In conclusion, in the 1970s, more
men
pursued
further
education
,
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the trend changed, and women took over in the 1990s.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words education, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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