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Some people change the type of work frequently, while others do the same type of work for long time. Discuss both the views and give your Opinion

#people #change #type #work #time
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modern
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kind
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 of people one of them
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decide
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 to do the same
work
 for a decade and the
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second
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 to keep
change
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 their
work
. Both had
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advantages
,
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disadvantages
 and reasons. those who stay in the same
work
they
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love what they do and they
good
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 at it. if you are going to do something for a long time you will be
confdent
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confident
 and comfort to do it and that
simpily
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simply
 help you and your
work
.
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this
 is
sometime
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 boring and you will
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used
 to it even if you change your mind and try to do
someting
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something
 else you will need a period of time to be good at
somthing
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something
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second
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they
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like what they do and they have the
resitiens
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resilient
resilience
 enough to do something
defrient
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defiant
deficient
defriend
 and keep
discovring
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discussing
 what they want and what they
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logical structure
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introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
Each main point should be better supported with relevant examples and explanations. Try to develop your ideas further to provide a more comprehensive response.
complete response
Aim to fully address all parts of the task. Make sure to provide a balanced discussion of both viewpoints and to clearly state your own opinion.
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Present your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. Consider dividing your essay into more paragraphs to organize your thoughts better.
relevant specific examples
Use more specific and relevant examples to illustrate your points. This will help strengthen your argument and provide a clearer picture for the reader.
clear comprehensive ideas
You show an understanding of both viewpoints regarding job stability and changing careers.
complete response
You've made an attempt to address the advantages and disadvantages of both perspectives, which is essential for this type of essay.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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