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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given Bar chart illustrates
about
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Finland and
Swedan
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Sweden
countrie's
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countries
country's
divorce
 between the
year
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years
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 2011
an
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and
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 2015.
Overall
, Sweden experienced
upward
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an upward
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 trend
While
,
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downward
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the downward
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 trend showed by Finland throughout the period.
Hence
,
divorce
 rates
was
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fluctuated in given the years. It can be clearly seen
, In
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that in
 2011,
Finland
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Finland's
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divorce
 amount
has been
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was
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 at 37% after that,
that was
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which
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 plummeted in the next
year
,
then
it was
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climbed by 5% in 2013.
Moreover
, it has
rose
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risen
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 moderately over 40%.
In
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end
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 of the
year
, that was
hold
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held
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 steadily at approximately 40%.
According to
 information, the proportion of
divorce
 in Sweden in 2011,
which
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was
at
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37%. In the following
year
, that declined significantly by 5%.
However
, it was surged gradually in 2013.
Furthermore
, which
initially
 showed
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 wedding couple's
divorce
 percentage was slightly grown-up in the next
year
 after that.
In
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 the end of the
year
, that was hit-off at 37%. In
compare
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 with,
divorce
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the divorce
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 rate of both countries in 2015 and 2011, which has been
leveled-off
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levelled off
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 at 37%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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