The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. the table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparations where relevant.

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. the table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparations where relevant.
There is a table that
provide
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the average number of individuals online from November 1997 to August 2001.
Also
, it can be seen the percentage of those
people
to
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in
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the world population.
At the end
of 1997, there were only 76
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people
online and they were only 1.8% of the total living
people
.
On
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In
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August 2001, the number increased to 513
millions
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million
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.
Also
, the ratio of the
people
was almost 5 times higher than
1997
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in 1997
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. It can be said that there is an
increasing
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of
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in
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number year by year because
in
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, in
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the chart, there
are
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were
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529
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people
online
at the end
of 2001.
On the other hand
, different languages which individuals use online can be found in the chart. It can be seen that almost half of
the
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human beings use
English
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the English
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language. The most second used language is Japanese with 8.9%.
Additionally
, Chinese, German, and Spanish
is
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are
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following with 8.8%, 6.8%, and 6.5% respectively. After that, the most used languages are Korean, Italian, French, Portuguese, and Dutch. Only 10% of the
people
use other languages.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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