The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in  Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the yearly
sales
made by three bakeries (
Amandine
Bakery
,
Mari
Bakeshop
, and
Bolo
Cakery
) over the period of 10 years from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
sales
of all the following bakeries increased over the years;
however
,
Mari
Bakeshop
sales
dropped frequently. In 2000, The
Mari
Bakeshop
dominated the market with its competitors falling far behind in
sales
, and it generated around $80K in revenue. The figure for the
Amandine
Bakery
stood at nearly $55k,
while
the
Bolo
Cakery
made just about $20k. Over the course of the next 5 years, the
sales
for
Bolo
Cakery
experienced a significant surge in income, and it doubled to nearly $40k in 2003. Meanwhile, the income remained relatively stable for
Amandine
Bakery
.
However
, in 2006; the trends took a dramatic turn, and the
sales
for
Mari
Bakeshop
plummeted rapidly,
they
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dropped below $60k, and for
Amandine
Bakery
, the figure increased exponentially, reaching its peak at nearly $100k which is the highest in comparison to all.
Similarly
, the
sales
of
Bolo
Cakery
also
increased, and it overtook the
Mari
Bakeshop
with the double amount of
sales
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, amandine, bakery, mari, bakeshop, bolo, cakery, k with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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