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The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.

The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.
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The line graph illustrates the weekly
consumption
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 of three types of fast
food
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—
hamburgers
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,
fish
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 &
chips
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, and
pizza
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—in the United Kingdom over a 20-year
period
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 from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
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,
pizza
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 was the most consumed fast
food
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 at the beginning of the
period
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, but its popularity declined steadily over time.
In contrast
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, the
consumption
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 of
hamburgers
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 and
fish
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 &
chips
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 increased significantly, with
fish
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 &
chips
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 becoming the most
favored
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favoured
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 fast
food
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 by the end of the
period
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. In 1970, the
consumption
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 of
pizza
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 stood at 300
grams
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 per
week
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, making it the most popular fast
food
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. Meanwhile, both
hamburgers
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 and
fish
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 &
chips
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 were consumed much less, each at under 100
grams
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 per
week
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.
However
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,
pizza
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consumption
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 gradually decreased throughout the 1970s and 1980s, reaching a low of 200
grams
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 per
week
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 by 1985.
Conversely
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, the demand for
hamburgers
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 and
fish
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 &
chips
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 saw a marked increase over the same
period
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. The
consumption
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 of
hamburgers
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 began to rise steadily in the early 1970s, overtaking
pizza
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 around 1980 and continuing to climb
thereafter
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.
Fish
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 &
chips
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,
however
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, experienced the most dramatic growth, especially after 1980. By 1990,
fish
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 &
chips
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consumption
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 had soared to 500
grams
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 per
week
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, the highest figure recorded on the graph, making it the most popular
fast
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fast-food
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food
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, chips, period, pizza, food, hamburgers, grams, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • dietary preferences
  • steady increase
  • significant drop
  • peak points
  • economic conditions
  • marketing strategies
  • health awareness
  • public health impact
  • cultural shifts
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