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In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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The governments of many countries have been prioritizing
growth
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 in
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economy
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the economy
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 over any other concerns.
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 strategy has some advantages and disadvantages, and
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Growth
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 in the
economy
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 of a
country
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 is a major concern among the governing bodies because every sector is dependent on it for
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 development. If there is no capital to spend, every sector would reach a standstill.
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, it remains a primary goal.
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, Sri Lanka, a South-Asian
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, which is rich in both natural and human resources with a great scope for development, had a major
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economy
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economic
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 crash,
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 leading to devastating riots, and
emergency
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 was declared in the
country
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.
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, focusing on
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ecomonic
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economic
growth
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 is essential for
smooth
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 running of the
country
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.
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, there are a few drawbacks of focusing on just the
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 as, that it comes at a cost of neglecting some important aspects that need urgent attention like medicine, and education among the various other needs of the local people.
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, recently a law was passed in India, under which private companies were introduced as distributors of agricultural products.
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 improving the
economy
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 of the
country
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, but it would significantly decrease the profit margin of the poor farmers.
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country
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. In conclusion,
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 prioritizing economic
growth
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 is necessary, it is
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 important to keep in mind other sectors, and how the decisions would
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 the quality of life of the people residing in the
country
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • standard of living
  • infrastructure development
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental impact
  • wealth disparity
  • modernization
  • sustainable development
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • industrialization
  • ecological footprint
  • capital investment
  • urbanization
  • economic prosperity
  • fiscal policy
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