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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#companies #countries
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 of Firms with multinational workers has been
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 recent years. That opportunity brings a variety of
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environment
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 and equal
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 it can cause
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 lack of communication and cultural problems.
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debate
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of companies with employees aspect. One of the greatest advantages of working in a global company is
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 variety of
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environment
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environments
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. Workers can learn from their friends who
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 different backgrounds.
Additionally
, individuals from different countries can
work
 easily in multinational firms. Because
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firms are
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 and
they
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can accept workers from every nationality.
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 I have an Indian
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 who works in a global company in Germany.
On the other hand
, cultural differences can bring different
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 employees. Especially their style as a team player can differ.
Also
, lack of language skills and
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misunderstanding
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 can bring problems in projects. When I was working with Germans, I was not able to hundred
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, and I remember we had some misunderstood which caused some problems in
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To sum up
, there
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 great advantages and disadvantages of increasing of multinational companies in development lands. Working in
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 environment is great benefits for everyone,
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 it can
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some
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 lack of
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coherence cohesion
Work on your logical structure by organizing your points more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and be logically ordered to build your argument smoothly.
task achievement
Improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas. Make sure each point is fully explained and supported with specific examples. This will strengthen your argument and make it more convincing.
general
Pay attention to grammar and vocabulary use. While small inaccuracies won’t significantly affect your score, consistent errors can make your essay harder to read and understand.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame your argument well.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples to support your points, such as your personal experience working with Germans.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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