In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Recently,
Advertisings
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in businesses are boosted that their
products
are
new
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now
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using many ways. I will introduce two reasons why they
are exaggerate
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of
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apply
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‘new’
thigs
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things
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.
First
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reason is many
people
cannot help but buy new things. They envy other
people
who have a new
product
.
For example
, when Apple company
start
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to sell new
products
which are smartphones, laptops or gadgets,
very
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long
que
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queue
is there in front of Apple
store
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. They want to get new
apple
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products
earlier than any other
people
. The new
products
attract
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interests
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of
people
. So, companies exaggerate the word “new” in their advertising.
Second
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reason is that advertising of new
products
induce
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the customers to buy
product
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without their consciousness. New
products
look high quality. So most
of
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people
buy a new thing without researching what the point of
products
are
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new. Sometimes new
product
are decreased
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their
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capability, or only the color of
outfit
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are
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changed.
New
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The new
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product
is not always upgraded.
For example
,
last
month, I bought a hand dryer from
online
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the online
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shop. I had used the old one, and it was very good. So I believe the new one is better than
old
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one, so I decided to buy it. I did not check the details of
new
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a new
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product
. The reason why advertising
emphasis
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emphasises
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that their
products
are new
are
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people
’s desire to purchase new
products
and unconsciousness of details of new things. So I think
this
phenomenon is not good for
customer
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customers
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. So I hope to stop
emphasis
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the newness in their advertising.
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