The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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The bar chart gives information about the number of

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citizens who graduated from university and did not apply for

full time

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jobs after graduating in 2008.

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, it is evident that the majority of both

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graduates

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and

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post

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graduates

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choose to continue their

study

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studies

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insignificant minority preferred to do voluntary work. On the one hand, it is obvious that the most popular option for many

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graduates

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was to

further

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their

study

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studies

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and have their Masters or even

PHD

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PhD

degree, which accounted for 29,665

individual

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individuals

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, most

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post

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postgraduates

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graduates

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has

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choosen

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chosen

to continue studying which

comprised

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around 2,725 of the population. followed by the second popular option for them

and

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apply

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which

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was working part-time which accounted for approximately 2,535

person

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. The remaining destination

such

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unemployment

unempolyment

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unemployment

and voluntary work

were

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was

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the least preferred for many

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graduates

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and

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post

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postgraduates

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graduates

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,each being around16,235 and 3,500 for

freshly

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fresh

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graduates

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whereas

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for

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post

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postgraduates

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graduates

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,it was around 1,625 and exactly 345

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, graduates, post with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

164 words

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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time,people would always choose not to work. do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think it is the best way to deal with distruptive children in the classroom? What other solutions are there?

Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most people do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?