The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. TASK 1

#show #uk #graduate #post #students #work #college

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The bar chart gives information about the number of

citizens who graduated from university and did not apply for

full time

Add a hyphen

full-time

show examples

jobs after graduating in 2008.

Overall

, it is evident that the majority of both

graduates

and

post

Add a hyphen

post-graduates

show examples

graduates

choose to continue their

study

Fix the agreement mistake

studies

show examples

Whereas

Change the article

show examples

insignificant minority preferred to do voluntary work. On the one hand, it is obvious that the most popular option for many

graduates

was to

further

their

study

Fix the agreement mistake

studies

show examples

and have their Masters or even

PHD

Correct your spelling

PhD

degree, which accounted for 29,665

individual

Fix the agreement mistake

individuals

show examples

Nevertheless

, most

post

Correct your spelling

postgraduates

show examples

graduates

has

Change the verb form

have

show examples

choosen

Correct your spelling

chosen

to continue studying which

comprised

Wrong verb form

comprises

show examples

around 2,725 of the population. followed by the second popular option for them

and

Correct word choice

apply

show examples

Correct pronoun usage

which

show examples

was working part-time which accounted for approximately 2,535

person

Change to a plural noun

people

show examples

. The remaining destination

such

Correct your spelling

unemployment

unempolyment

Correct your spelling

unemployment

and voluntary work

were

Change the verb form

was

show examples

the least preferred for many

graduates

and

post

Correct your spelling

postgraduates

show examples

graduates

,each being around16,235 and 3,500 for

freshly

Change the adverb

fresh

show examples

graduates

whereas

for

Add the comma(s)

, for

show examples

post

Correct your spelling

postgraduates

show examples

graduates

,it was around 1,625 and exactly 345

Submitted by helpme on Sun Sep 01 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

▼

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, graduates, post with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

▼

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

164 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4
band
Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.
Nowdays, many people think marrying for money is best option. I also think that we should marry for love not for money because love more important than money. But money is also important but we should not marry for it. In this esaay i am going to share my opinion.
7.5
band
In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
The drive to excel academically mixed with admiration of entrepreneurial success has made a few elites in many parts of the world earn extortionate incomes that make them stand out. Some seem to favour this view as being pleasant to any nation, while others oppose it and think law enforcement should regulate people's salaries so that they do not surpass a certain threshold. In this essay l will discuss both views and why l have chosen to stand with the former statement.
4.5
band
It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.
Generally people consider media, pop culture, and friends have fundamental aspect for children development. On the other hand, some people claimed, biggest significant development of child came from their family itself. In my opinion, a combination of the two have many effects for children.
4.5
band
Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Modern world many of the countries expensing their own people money for developing sports and players to be participating in the foreign sports phenomenon, while others thinking this money should be spent to enhance their own country people life. I entirely not agree for this statement also will giving the relevant examples of the below mentioned points.
5
band
In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching many students. Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?
Until few years back students were taught only in traditional class rooms where teachers would give them lectures. However, due to the increase in technology advancement, medium of teaching has transferred to online classes. I think this a boon for both students and teachers. Even though there are some demerits to this teaching method, the advantage of it outweighs the minor drawbacks which shall be elaborated in the following passages.

The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. TASK 1

Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching many students. Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?