The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. TASK 1

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The bar chart gives information about the number of

citizens who graduated from university and did not apply for

full time

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jobs after graduating in 2008.

Overall

, it is evident that the majority of both

graduates

and

post

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post-graduates

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graduates

choose to continue their

study

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studies

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Whereas

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insignificant minority preferred to do voluntary work. On the one hand, it is obvious that the most popular option for many

graduates

was to

further

their

study

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studies

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and have their Masters or even

PHD

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PhD

degree, which accounted for 29,665

individual

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individuals

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Nevertheless

, most

post

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postgraduates

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graduates

has

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choosen

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chosen

to continue studying which

comprised

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comprises

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around 2,725 of the population. followed by the second popular option for them

and

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apply

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which

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was working part-time which accounted for approximately 2,535

person

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people

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. The remaining destination

such

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unemployment

unempolyment

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unemployment

and voluntary work

were

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the least preferred for many

graduates

and

post

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postgraduates

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graduates

,each being around16,235 and 3,500 for

freshly

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graduates

whereas

for

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, for

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post

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postgraduates

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graduates

,it was around 1,625 and exactly 345

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

164 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. TASK 1

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

You are working in a company and you have decided to leave your current employment. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: Explain why you are leaving. Explain why you have decided to leave your company. Tell your employer what you plan to do after leaving your present employment.

Some people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. what are the advantages and dis advantages of this trend?