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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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areas
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kind
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kinds
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 of
dance
clases
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classes
class
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teenagers
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town
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 of Australia
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have
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 recently attending.we can
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 that the
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dance
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Private
 studios is twice as much
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than
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 the school halls.
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college -based
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occupaid
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occupied
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area
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community
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area
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covered
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18% is
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that teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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to
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dance
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extremely
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those
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tap
dance
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students
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studios
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dance
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teenager
teenagers
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greater
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, furthermore".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, dance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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