because of many reasons like work and migration or many other reasons, some of them see that in future
people
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can
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be able to
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because
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the new roads and inside
traveling
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. some countries are not that big they can go for
holidays
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in the
country
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. in my
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i
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do not agree with them, the reason that
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disagree
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is that most
people
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are not in the same
country
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with their
famiries
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families
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work
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of work
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or any other reason.
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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly. Start with an introduction where you introduce your main point. Follow this with body paragraphs that each focus on a single idea or reason, providing examples and explanations. Finally, conclude by summarizing your points and reiterating your argument.
task achievement
Try to make your argument clearer by elaborating on your points. Provide specific examples or reasons that help explain why you believe that more people will or won’t choose to go on holidays in their own country in the future.
linguistic accuracy
Improve the language accuracy and variety to make your points clearer. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to enhance the readability of your essay.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is the first step in building a persuasive argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay touches upon relevant points such as work, migration, and transportation infrastructure, which are important factors in the discussion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
In a contemporary society, governments have been taking a variety of measures to encourage people to use cars less. Some people claim that imposing tolls on roads in heavy traffic can be the best way to reduce their car usage. I strongly support this idea from the environmental and psychological perspectives.
The poor management of children’s health has been highlighted over the last few decades. From this aspect, questions that childhood obesity has become an alarming problem are raised. The primary causes of this and measures that should be taken to reduce childhood obesity will be illustrated.
Learning is a two-way process that thrives on the contribution of learners and teachers. While students are responsible for appreciative participation, teachers also play an essential role in creating an engaging environment that motivates their learners. To achieve this, they are expected to provide students with constructive feedback and assessment. This essay will make the case for the argument.
Nowadays, more people prefer to use their own cars rather than public modes of transport. The main reasons, in my opinion, are the increasing number of middle-class groups and governments should improve the quality of public transportation. essay will discuss the reasons behind this trend and offer possible solutions.
The use of social media is shifting direct interaction these years. The benefits are it makes communication easier and also open networking is much simpler. However, it replaces direct interaction for some occasions that need to be elaborate. Due to these facts, I wholeheartedly agree that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits.