because of many reasons like work and migration or many other reasons, some of them see that in future
people
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can
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be able to
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the new roads and inside
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. some countries are not that big they can go for
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in the
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do not agree with them, the reason that
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disagree
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is that most
people
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are not in the same
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with their
famiries
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families
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or any other reason.
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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly. Start with an introduction where you introduce your main point. Follow this with body paragraphs that each focus on a single idea or reason, providing examples and explanations. Finally, conclude by summarizing your points and reiterating your argument.
task achievement
Try to make your argument clearer by elaborating on your points. Provide specific examples or reasons that help explain why you believe that more people will or won’t choose to go on holidays in their own country in the future.
linguistic accuracy
Improve the language accuracy and variety to make your points clearer. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to enhance the readability of your essay.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is the first step in building a persuasive argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay touches upon relevant points such as work, migration, and transportation infrastructure, which are important factors in the discussion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
People are facing the dilemma of whether or not they should control the amount of noise. While some argue that making as much noise as they want is a fact of life, I would argue that strictly regulating our sound is a must.
Education plays a key role in the development of society and its individual members. I completely agree with this opinion and believe that everyone should have the opportunity to get an education.
In the contemporary area,advertising plays a vital role in shaping consumer behavior and influencing purchasing decisions. While Some believe that advertising persuades people to acquire groceries they have a necessity for ,others argue it offers valuable knowledge about new inventions. Two aforementioned views will be discussed thoroughly in the following paragraphs before presenting my personal perspective.
One school of thought instead of watching the event on television, watching a live performance is more enjoyable. The writer of this essay strongly agrees with this notion as not only atmosphere and immersion but also supporting artists and athletes.
There have been innumerable technological advancements over the past century. Computers are found in many devices in the home, such as kettles, refrigerators and fans and so it can be said we are becoming reliant on using them for everything. This can be a good thing since it can make life easier and more luxurious, but does this come with hidden costs?