because of many reasons like work and migration or many other reasons, some of them see that in future
people
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can
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the new roads and inside
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. some countries are not that big they can go for
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in the
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do not agree with them, the reason that
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disagree
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is that most
people
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are not in the same
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with their
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families
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or any other reason.
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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly. Start with an introduction where you introduce your main point. Follow this with body paragraphs that each focus on a single idea or reason, providing examples and explanations. Finally, conclude by summarizing your points and reiterating your argument.
task achievement
Try to make your argument clearer by elaborating on your points. Provide specific examples or reasons that help explain why you believe that more people will or won’t choose to go on holidays in their own country in the future.
linguistic accuracy
Improve the language accuracy and variety to make your points clearer. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to enhance the readability of your essay.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is the first step in building a persuasive argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay touches upon relevant points such as work, migration, and transportation infrastructure, which are important factors in the discussion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
I hope you are doing well. I am glad that you want to learn a new sport to keep yourself active and I am writing this letter to give you some advice about learning a new game.
It is reckoned that foreign languages should not be set as compulsory subjects due to the students who can't naturally learn at school. In my aspect, I quite disagree with the thought.
The debate over whether everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet to avoid health problems associated with meat consumption is a prominent one. This essay will discuss both perspectives and provide a reasoned viewpoint.
A common trend frequently around the globe in all facets of society is that smartphones belong to each individual. While smartphones support our lives becoming more facile, the inevitable drawback of using phones is that people who are able to focus on smartphones too much, affect negatively on their activity and body clock.
Although some contend that advertisements are more pervasive than ever before and that people have become desensitized to them, I disagree with this statement and argue that advertising has been more persuasive and effective in product launches as a result of improved copywriting techniques and its expansive influence on social media.