because of many reasons like work and migration or many other reasons, some of them see that in future
people
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can
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be able to
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the new roads and inside
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. some countries are not that big they can go for
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in the
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do not agree with them, the reason that
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disagree
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is that most
people
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are not in the same
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with their
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families
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or any other reason.
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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly. Start with an introduction where you introduce your main point. Follow this with body paragraphs that each focus on a single idea or reason, providing examples and explanations. Finally, conclude by summarizing your points and reiterating your argument.
task achievement
Try to make your argument clearer by elaborating on your points. Provide specific examples or reasons that help explain why you believe that more people will or won’t choose to go on holidays in their own country in the future.
linguistic accuracy
Improve the language accuracy and variety to make your points clearer. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling to enhance the readability of your essay.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is the first step in building a persuasive argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay touches upon relevant points such as work, migration, and transportation infrastructure, which are important factors in the discussion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Some say that the extinction of some animals and plant species is the main environmental issue, while others argue that there are other more urgent environmental complications. This essay will argue that although the disappearance of animals and plants can cause chaos in biodiversity and life danger, pollution and climate change are major problems.
There is an ongoing debate about the best type of products consumers should purchase .While some individuals are of the opinion that buying quality items that have longer lifespans is better than spending money on purchasing lesser quality goods that are cheap and less durable,others think otherwise. In my opinion, I believe that purchasing quality durable products that are expensive is better because people will be able to get value for their money and also gain a good reputation. This essay will explore both views and give a concluding opinion.
There is no denying the fact that every company has their own policy and rules. While it is a commonly held belief that it is unfair to have a set retirement age of around 65 years old, there is also an argument that opposes this idea. In my opinion, I consider that, regardless of what kind of job, everyone should receive a pension from a young age.
On-site learning in universities used to be the only way of teaching students, nevertheless, the innovation has been much better developed for creating online learning these days. Many people are concerned that the lectures given by professors will be no longer needed in the the future. I partially agree with this statement. The following supports and examples will be discussed below.
Nowadays, there is a trend of constructing the new buildings in a lot of cities. Some people argue that a city should maintain traditional architectures rather than replacing them with modern ones. I agree to a certain extent with this view. While there may be some convincing reasons why municipal councils should keep traditional constructions, the reasons why they should replace them with modern ones are more significant.