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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The data gives information about how the average
temperature
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 changes each month and about the amount of hours the sun is rising in a year in
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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. 
Firstly
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, it appears clear that for the first part of the year, up until May,
Sydney
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, being in the south hemisphere, where is summer season, is much warmer than
London
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 and New
York
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.
However
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, as it can be seen, the
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 moderately decreases, going down from 25
degrees
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 in January to 20 in May,
whereas
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 it increases in both
London
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, from around 10
degrees
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 to 20
at the end
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 of May, and New
York
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, whose climate varies progressively from below 5
degrees
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 to 20 at the beginning of the same month.
Moreover
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, it is noticeable that the
temperature
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 in
London
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 and New
York
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 keeps rising until the middle of July
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 when it reaches its peak. In fact, there are approximately 30
degrees
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 in the Big Apple by
then
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,
while
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 the British capital seems to be 5
degrees
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 cooler.
On the other hand
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, the
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 continues to decline until its minimum of around 15
degrees
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 in the central days of July. After that, the
temperature
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 drops again gradually in the American and European cities.
In contrast
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, it goes up in the Australian capital.
Finally
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, the table suggests that
London
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, with 1180 of sunshine per year, is, on average, way less sunny than New
York
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 and
Sydney
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, whose total annual hours of sun exposure are quite similar.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, london, york, sydney, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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