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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
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The given chart illustrates the forecasted world's
illiteracy
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 percentages comparing different parts of the world
as well as
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 with male and female categorizations for the previous year.
Overall
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, It can be seen from the diagram that the
illiteracy
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 rates are very low in developed countries
where as
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 the rates are significantly high in South Asian countries.
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 at a glance, it can be noted that the
illiteracy
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 percentage among females is higher compared to the male population regardless of the region they consider. 35% of males and 55% of females from South Asia lack literacy ability
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while
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indicating it as the highest rate
than
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in
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 the rest of the world. The noteworthy point from the given diagram is that the
illiteracy
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 gap
among
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 men and women in developed countries and the Caribbean region is far lesser compared to the gender-wise percentage differences for other regions.
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 the Arab States
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 the highest gender-wise percentage gap with 28% and 52% male and female rates respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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