The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The maps illustrate the current arrangement of a public library, and how it was 20 years ago.
Overall
, the library now has more free spaces and
well-organised
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with some additional features like the Cafe and lecture
room
.
First,
they made the entrance more welcoming by placing a cafe and computer
room
in the front rather than an enquiry desk and reading, and they removed the Tables and the chairs that were in the middle.
As a result
,
this
change will prepare you for what is next rather than starting with seeing a large amount of books.
Secondly
, they have added a lecture
room
in place of the
children
's
room
, but they did not remove the
children
's
room
instead
, they made it in the upper left corner.
In addition
, they have supplemented the
children
's
room
with storytelling events so the
children
can enjoy their learning process
,
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and just read the
children
's fiction books by themselves.
Also
, they have placed two sofas in that area if anyone wants to rest.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room, children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • conversion
  • reflecting
  • digital literacy
  • accessible
  • shift towards
  • community-focused
  • relocated
  • decreased demand
  • inviting
  • increased focus
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