Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often argued that if we live in time

people

have more choices than before, I really agree with

this

statement because of the internet effect. Everything has improved from before. So,

this

essay will discuss first how

this

statement is true,

also

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, will discuss how is it wrong in

people

’s view. Some

people

see that we have today many chances in every section, it is true because of the revolution on the internet.

For example

, today you can easily open a business in your home without getting permission from anyone,

also

you can buy and sell many things through the internet, you can learn any skill to improve yourself and your knowledge

you

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apply

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then

you can apply to any job

while

you are in

home

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the home

a home

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, and you will receive your application.

Furthermore

, it is

easily

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to find chances these days

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the other

side

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side,

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people

believe that nowadays we lost many choices

comparing

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with the past,

for

example

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example,

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took

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most of the jobs from

the

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apply

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people

in many sections like programming or building houses and it is close to

see

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a robot in

medical

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the medical

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field,

also

, many

people

does not educate enough so if they didn’t find a job it means that there is no chance In conclusion, many

people

think that if there is a

chances

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or not, it’s not about that, in my point of view I think you need to have

the

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apply

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enough education and have many good skills and efficiency you will easily find a good chance.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

254 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

overwhelmed
decision fatigue
paralysis by analysis
consumerism
globalization
personal autonomy
market saturation
option overload
decision-making process
psychological well-being
buyer's remorse
customization
trade-offs
minimalism
information superhighway

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