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The pie chart and table illustrate causes of worldwide land degradation and in which regions it has happened

The pie chart and table illustrate causes of worldwide land degradation and in which regions it has happened
#land #degradation #regions
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The
pie
chart
 and table illustrate
causes
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 of worldwide land degradation and in which regions it has happened.
Overall
, what stands out from the
pie
chart
 is that over-grazing and
deforestation
 saw the biggest points, which accounted for about two-thirds of the
pie
chart
. What stands out from the table is that
Europe
 saw the highest results in all categories, except for overgrazing. Looking at the
pie
chart
, over-grazing
has
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is
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 35%, making it the number-one category on the list. Over-cultivation and
deforestation
was
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were
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 at 28% and 30%, respectively,
while
 others contained only 7%. Regarding
to
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apply
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the table,
deforestation
 in
Europe
 was five times as high as
Oceania
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in Oceania
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, at 9.8 and 1.7,
accordingly
.
However
, in
overcultivation
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over-cultivation
over cultivation
,
Oceania
 saw 0%,
whereas
Europe
 saw the highest result at 7.7%. In overgrazing,
Oceania
 (11.3%) was two times as high as
Europe
 (5.5%).
Nevertheless
, in total land degraded,
Europe
 (23%) was much more popular than
Oceania
 (13%). What is more, North America saw the lowest point in all categories:
deforestation
 (0.2%), over-cultivation (3.3%), overgrazing (1.5%),
total
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and total
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 land degraded (5%).
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, deforestation, europe, oceania with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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