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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares data about how many people who have various genders teach at 6 several educational
setting
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settings
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 in the UK in 2019.
Overall
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, it is important that the number of
femals
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females
female
 who are
teacher
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teachers
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are
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is
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 more than the men;
moreover
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, most of them work under
college
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the college
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 system.
According to
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 the
mailes
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emails
 graph,
men's
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men
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 tend
climbed
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to climb
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frome
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from
 Nursery to
University
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 owing to the fact that at the start, they are roughly 5% in both nursey and
primery
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primary
;
then
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 it
jump
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enourmesly
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enormously
 to 50% in
secindery
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secondary
school
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 and it does not have visual changes to collage and privet training
institut
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institute
 after that leap significantly to 70% for
university
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.
In contrast
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, women, the main
teacher
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teachers
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, from
pre-
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pre--school
school
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 to
university
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 dip
overwhelminglly
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overwhelmingly
 inasmuch as a number of them work for
pre
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pre-school
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school
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 and
primery
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primary
school
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 approximately 95 and 92 per cent.
Thereafter
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, their fashion
decline
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declined
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 Substantially to the percentage
that is
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 almost
same
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the same
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 as
another
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other
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 sex in these groups
such
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 as secondary
school
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,
collage
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college
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, and privet training
institut
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institute
;
however
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, for
university
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, it is 30%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational setting
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • nursery school
  • higher education
  • proportion
  • outnumber
  • trend
  • comparison
  • historical factors
  • social influence
  • teaching profession
  • data interpretation
  • balance
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