Some
museums
are
,
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to those
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purchasing tickets
areCorrect subject-verb agreement
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mandatory.
by not paying for
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the
museums
more people would tend to visit,
however
, I believe that authorities could use the
museums
' income to take care of them, which is more
.
It is argued that free
museums
are more frequently visited and have more
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impact on general people. Because
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many people are not educated enough to appreciate history and culture.
As a result
, they do not have the tendency to spend money on
these kindChange the determiner
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of activities ,so by keeping cultural places free they would visit more often and the chance of them being educated raises.
For instance
,
NegarestanCorrect article usage
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museumCapitalize word
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is free once
in Change preposition
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a year and
inChange preposition
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that day, it has the most visitors of all the year.
Consequently
, many youngsters get attracted to traditional paintings, which they have seen
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that specific day.
However
, I believe that visiting cultural
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do not have a knock-on impact on all the visitors and it is more beneficial to
educatedChange the form of the verb
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them in the school
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in
museums
.
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the other hand,
museums
are mostly located in historical and old buildings and it is necessary to avoid
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destructionsFix the agreement mistake
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, which happens
duringChange preposition
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the decades.
This
action ,
however
, is pricey and by selling tickets a major part of the cost would be covered. Not all
of Change preposition
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the Correct article usage
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cities and countries can be financially supportive
throughChange preposition
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this
pathway, so the
museums
' managers have to take action in their own hands.
For example
,
as a result
of
lowCorrect article usage
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budget, 'Chehel Sotun' of Isfahan was nearly ruined 10 years ago.
However
, the mayor ,by getting
enteringCorrect article usage
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fee, managed to
the precious building. I believe that getting a proper amount of
would be useful for managing the
museums
in a more efficient way.
In conclusion,
while
making
museums
free would lead to more visitors and growing
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awareness and knowledge, the ticket,s fee for maintaining the building is a necessity and without the money, many
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would be ruined by now.