The pie chart below show the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below show the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The chart illustrates the leading causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
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,
while
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the table gives data on its causes in 3 regions, namely North America, Europe and Oceania in the 1990s.
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,
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the main reason causing
land
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to be less productive is over-grazing and the minor reasons are others, the
region
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affected by
land
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degradation
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the most was Europe and the least was North America. The second leader among problems which lead to
land
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degradation
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is
deforestation
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being equal to 30%. Meanwhile, over-cultivation is represented by 28%, other reasons cause less productivity just by 7%.
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, Europe was the
region
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affected the most which is observed not only by its
overall
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score which was 23%, but
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by the causes harming
land
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the most:
deforestation
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and over-cultivation constituted 9.8% and 7.7% respectively. In comparison,
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over-grazing caused the most damage in Oceania, where it made up 11.3%, over-cultivation did not play any role in soil
degradation
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there.
In addition
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, North America was the
region
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, which faced
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problem in a minor way with
deforestation
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being 0.2%, which justifies that
deforestation
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was the least important problem in that
region
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and
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the minimum in comparison with other territories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, region, deforestation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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