You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.
The bar chart illustrates the
employment
rate
of Austrailian
men Correct your spelling
Australian
in
different ages in 1984, 2001 and 2014. Change preposition
of
It is clear that
men aged 35 to 44 have the highest rate
of employment
in all three years
.
First of all, employment
of aged 15 years
old to 19 years
old seem to have difficulty getting a job these days as the proportion has a decreasing trend. In 1984 it was around 63%, then
60% in 2001 and finally
50% in 2014.
Secondly
, people aged 35 years
old to 44 years
old have the highest rate
of employment
. The figure remains stable for all three years
at roughly 90% which is really close to all men getting employed.
Finally
, the rate
of employers aged 60 years
old to 64 years
old has an upward trend rising from approximately 40% in 1984 to 45% in 2001 and over 50% in 2014.
In conclusion, it is seen that employment
Correct article usage
the employment
rate
in age
15-19 has a decreasing trend Fix the agreement mistake
ages
while
the rate
of people in 60-64 has an upward tendency. On the other hand
, proportion
of employers in 35-44 remains stable.Add an article
the proportion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rate, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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