You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.
The bar chart illustrates the
employment
Use synonyms
rate
of Use synonyms
Austrailian
men Correct your spelling
Australian
in
different ages in 1984, 2001 and 2014. Change preposition
of
It is clear that
men aged 35 to 44 have the highest Linking Words
rate
of Use synonyms
employment
in all three Use synonyms
years
.
First of all, Use synonyms
employment
of aged 15 Use synonyms
years
old to 19 Use synonyms
years
old seem to have difficulty getting a job these days as the proportion has a decreasing trend. In 1984 it was around 63%, Use synonyms
then
60% in 2001 and Linking Words
finally
50% in 2014.
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Secondly
, people aged 35 Linking Words
years
old to 44 Use synonyms
years
old have the highest Use synonyms
rate
of Use synonyms
employment
. The figure remains stable for all three Use synonyms
years
at roughly 90% which is really close to all men getting employed.
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Finally
, the Linking Words
rate
of employers aged 60 Use synonyms
years
old to 64 Use synonyms
years
old has an upward trend rising from approximately 40% in 1984 to 45% in 2001 and over 50% in 2014.
In conclusion, it is seen that Use synonyms
Use synonyms
employment
Correct article usage
the employment
rate
in Use synonyms
age
15-19 has a decreasing trend Fix the agreement mistake
ages
while
the Linking Words
rate
of people in 60-64 has an upward tendency. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
proportion
of employers in 35-44 remains stable.Add an article
the proportion
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rate, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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