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The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
the
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attendance
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attendances
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 for Grandville Stadium in 3 years namely across three
type
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 of events
threater
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threaters
, sporting
event
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events
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 and concerts.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
,
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 the number of
the
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attendance was
dominated
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 in 2030;
whereas
, in 2017 the attendance figure was the lowest over the three event
type
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types
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. Observing the chart in more detail, the number in 2030 in Sporting
event
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was
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accounted for 170000. The Second one was in 2020 around 160000.
In contrast
, the lowest figure was in 2017 in
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a threater
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threater
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theatre
 roughly 10,000. One striking
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 to
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 is that both
in
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2020 and 2030 have
equal
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 amount
in
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threater
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threats
 about 20000.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance figures
  • projected
  • improvement project
  • major enhancement
  • trend
  • time span
  • analyze
  • decrease
  • stagnation
  • growth
  • critical increase
  • forecast
  • overview
  • comparison
  • anticipated
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