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The process of producing drinking water by solar power powdered pump and filter.

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The diagram illustrates the process of how making drinking
water
 with powdered pumps and filters from solar power. In general,
that is
 a largely mechanical process including several steps, beginning with collecting sunlight and ending with storing
water
. Having looked at the given picture for more details,
firstly
, the solar panel collects the sunlight from the sun and converts it into energy.
This
 energy will
then
 be transferred to the converter where the energy is converted into electricity.
Thirdly
, the electricity is delivered to the pump putting an underground well to handle the liquid. The process continues with the treated aqua being transported through the long pipe to the
water
 tank put on a wooden platform.
Next,
the first
water
 in the
water
 tank is treated into clean
water
.
Then
, the filtered liquid is transferred through the small pipe and a tap is opened to follow the drinking
water
 into the moveable container.
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task achievement
Review grammar and vocabulary to ensure accurate usage of terms like 'powered' instead of 'powdered'.
coherence cohesion
Develop paragraphs more effectively, ensuring each stage of the process is clearly explained and logically connected.
coherence cohesion
Conclude your essay with a summary of the overall process to provide a definite ending.
task achievement
The essay provided a comprehensive response to the task, covering all key stages of the process.
task achievement
Main points were supported with relevant details.
coherence cohesion
The essay followed a clear sequence and logical flow.

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