The diagram shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of manufacturing bottled and canned fizzy drinks.
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Overall
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process
of making soft drinks involves 5 main stages starting with the Use synonyms
water
-cleaning Use synonyms
stage
and finishing with the packaging Use synonyms
stage
and delivery.
Having looked at the provided Use synonyms
process
for more details, it is apparent that in the first Use synonyms
stage
, raw Use synonyms
water
undergoes a filtration Use synonyms
process
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special equipment softens the Linking Words
water
, and chemicals are treated. Use synonyms
Subsequently
, the processed Linking Words
water
is pumped into electric heaters to experience the evaporation and carbonation Use synonyms
process
. In Use synonyms
this
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stage
, Use synonyms
water
is heated by electric heaters and Use synonyms
then
goes through a cooling pipe. Linking Words
Following
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this
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water
is carbonized by adding carbon dioxide.
In the mixing Use synonyms
stage
, Use synonyms
water
is sent to the mixing tank where colouring, syrup and flavour are combined with Use synonyms
water
. Use synonyms
Next,
it is filtered again and filled into bottles or cans. Linking Words
Lastly
, these products are packaged and Linking Words
then
transported to supermarkets to customers.Linking Words
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