The diagram shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of manufacturing bottled and canned fizzy drinks.
Overall
, the
process
of making soft drinks involves 5 main stages starting with the
water
-cleaning
stage
and finishing with the packaging
stage
and delivery. Having looked at the provided
process
for more details, it is apparent that in the first
stage
, raw
water
undergoes a filtration
process
.
Next,
special equipment softens the
water
, and chemicals are treated.
Subsequently
, the processed
water
is pumped into electric heaters to experience the evaporation and carbonation
process
. In
this
stage
,
water
is heated by electric heaters and
then
goes through a cooling pipe.
Following
this
,
water
is carbonized by adding carbon dioxide. In the mixing
stage
,
water
is sent to the mixing tank where colouring, syrup and flavour are combined with
water
.
Next,
it is filtered again and filled into bottles or cans.
Lastly
, these products are packaged and
then
transported to supermarkets to customers.
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