Many people today use their phones to communicate by sending text messages than talking. What are the reasons for this? Does it have more advantages than disadvantages?

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Over the past years, there has been an increasing use of
text
messages
than talking.
This
essay elaborates
why
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this
practice has more advantages by explaining two main reasons. The first argumentation is the possibility to communicate without directly interfering in the person's life we want to
comunicate
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communicate
with. The second one is the ability to be in contact
while
doing other tasks. The essay will provide examples and formulate a conclusion based
upon
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them. In times of acceleration of our life activities,
text
messages
become one of the most used
tool
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to communicate faster but in a more expanded
time
frame. The advantage of a
text
message
, in comparison to a phone call or a meeting, is that it can be sent whenever we want without interrupting the activity of the person we desire to reach out
.
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This
is an advantage
especially
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for
messages
that are not very important. In general, delivering a
text
message
implies sending a request that
not
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necessarily expect an immediate answer,
thus
it leaves more
time
to
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the person
receving
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receiving
it to answer.
For example
,
while
in a phone call receivers are
immediatly
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immediately
asked to stay connected and answer, in a
text
message
this
does not happen.
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in direct
talking
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talking,
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it is necessary to plan a meeting and arrange it. The use of
text
message
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messages
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has been progressively boosted by the incursion of social media in our lives like Facebook and Instagram
as well as
by the installation of
text
message
applications
such
as
Whattsapp
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WhatsApp
, Telegram, and Signal. All these tools have expanded the possibilities of being in different conversations at the same
time
while
being focused
in
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other tasks.
This
is because, the screen keeps a certain distance between people, and
therefore
a sort of privacy, which
favour
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favours
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to stay
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in touch and in the meantime working. In conclusion,
although
a
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1:1 talking or phone calls remain the most effective way to deliver important
contents
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,
text
messages
are revolutionising the way we keep conversations alive
due to
the possibility of expanding the conversations over
time
and concurrently with many different people .
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