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Many people today use their phones to communicate by sending text messages than talking. What are the reasons for this? Does it have more advantages than disadvantages?

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Over the past years, there has been an increasing use of
text
messages
 than talking.
This
 essay elaborates
why
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this
 practice has more advantages by explaining two main reasons. The first argumentation is the possibility to communicate without directly interfering in the person's life we want to
comunicate
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communicate
 with. The second one is the ability to be in contact
while
 doing other tasks. The essay will provide examples and formulate a conclusion based
upon
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 them. In times of acceleration of our life activities,
text
messages
 become one of the most used
tool
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 to communicate faster but in a more expanded
time
 frame. The advantage of a
text
message
, in comparison to a phone call or a meeting, is that it can be sent whenever we want without interrupting the activity of the person we desire to reach out
.
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This
 is an advantage
especially
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 for
messages
 that are not very important. In general, delivering a
text
message
 implies sending a request that
not
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 necessarily expect an immediate answer,
thus
 it leaves more
time
to
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for
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 the person
receving
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receiving
 it to answer.
For example
,
while
 in a phone call receivers are
immediatly
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immediately
 asked to stay connected and answer, in a
text
message
this
 does not happen.
Moreover
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 in direct
talking
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talking,
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 it is necessary to plan a meeting and arrange it. The use of
text
message
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messages
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 has been progressively boosted by the incursion of social media in our lives like Facebook and Instagram
as well as
 by the installation of
text
message
 applications
such
 as
Whattsapp
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WhatsApp
, Telegram, and Signal. All these tools have expanded the possibilities of being in different conversations at the same
time
while
 being focused
in
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 other tasks.
This
 is because, the screen keeps a certain distance between people, and
therefore
 a sort of privacy, which
favour
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favours
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to stay
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 in touch and in the meantime working. In conclusion,
although
a
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1:1 talking or phone calls remain the most effective way to deliver important
contents
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content
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,
text
messages
 are revolutionising the way we keep conversations alive
due to
 the possibility of expanding the conversations over
time
 and concurrently with many different people .
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task achievement
Your essay does well to address the question, however, the introduction could be slightly more concise. Try to clearly state your thesis statement early on.
coherence cohesion
To enhance your coherence, ensure your main points are always logically connected. Consider using more transition phrases between ideas.
task achievement
To improve task response, make sure all of your examples are highly specific and directly support your points. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and provides a clear final statement.
task achievement
Your essay includes key reasons and examples, making your argument compelling.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both clearly present and align well with the overall content.

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