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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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 bar chart depicts the
number
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 of new international
student’s origins
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students
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 at three universities. In general, most international
students
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comes
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 from India and the least international
students
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comes
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 from Colombia. Among the five countries,
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University
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the University
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 of Riverview is the most chosen
university
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 of all countries. India is the country with the highest
number
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 of international
students
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. Approximately, more than 4.000
students
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 enroll at these three universities. Nepal is the second
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. 5.000
students
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 from Nepal enroll at
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University
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the University
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 of Riverview, followed by Smithtown
University
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 and Earlwood
University
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who
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 has the same
number
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 of
students
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, 4.000. Vietnam is the third
countries
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country
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.
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 with India and Nepal, the
number
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 of
students
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 who choose Earlwood
University
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 is bigger than Smithtown
University
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. Next is Indonesia, the fourth country. The pattern of
chosen
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university
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 is
same
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with
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 Nepal. The least is Colombia. The
number
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 of international
students
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 from Colombia
is reach
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is reached
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 1.000.
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,
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 bar chart describes the
number
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 of international
student’s
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student at
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university
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universities
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 chosen among
three
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the three
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. The most chosen
university
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 is
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University
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the University
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 of Riverview.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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