The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
percentage
of routine physical activity of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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in various
age
groups in Australia in the year 2010.
Overall
, it is apparent that
regular
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exercise
percentage
in women was
more
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than in men in almost all
age
groups except for the 15 to
24-years-old
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24-year-old
group
which
male
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males
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scored higher than
female
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females
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. Regarding male regular exercise, it peaked in the 15 to 24
age
group
, with
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52.8
percent
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.
Then
it declined gradually till it hit the lowest
percent
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which is 39.5 for the
age
group
of 35 to 44;
however
, the
percentage
increased slowly again with
age
and was almost equal to that of
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females
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at
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the 65 and over
age
group
with a 45.7% Turning to female routine physical activity
percentage
, it was the lowest in the 15 to 24
group
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47.7%,
then
rose steadily till it reached
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a constant value
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in the
age
groups of 53 to 44, 45 to 54, and 55 to 64, which was 52.5%, 53.3%, and 53% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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