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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.
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The graphs delineate the average number of working
hours
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 among eight distinct professions
as well as
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 their
stress
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 and anxiety
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level
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.
Overall
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,
while
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 businessmen
work
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 the most among the others,
lecturers
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 spend the least of their time.
Although
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lecturers
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work
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 less, they experience the highest
level
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 of
stress
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 and anxiety in
this
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 group.
Business men
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Businessmen
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 are the busiest in
this
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 group, working 70
hours
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 a
week
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.
Moreover
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, movie producers stand second in
this
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 group working 60
hours
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 a
week
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 and the doctors who are the next most hardworking individuals, dedicate just over 50
hours
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 of their
week
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 to
work
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.
Furthermore
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, writers, programmers, and lawyers
work
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 for 45, 40, and 35
hours
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 respectively.
Finally
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, chefs and
lecturers
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 only spend 30 and 25
hours
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 of their time busy. Among all these stressful occupations,
lecturers
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 experience the most tension at
work
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, accounting for 25%. The second most stressful occupation is movie producing, making up 18% and after that being a doctor (15%). Lawyers and writers feel the same
level
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 of
stress
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, accounting for 8%.
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, with the long
hours
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 of working per
week
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,
business men
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businessmen
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 only experience 11% of
stress
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. The lowest
level
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 of
stress
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 goes to programmers, making up 5%. Chefs make up 10% of the whole proportion.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, stress, level, work, lecturers, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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