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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress level amongs professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or coollage lecurer.
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The graphs delineate the average number of working
hours
 among eight distinct professions
as well as
 their
stress
 and anxiety
level
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levels
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.
Overall
,
while
 businessmen
work
 the most among the others,
lecturers
 spend the least of their time.
Although
lecturers
work
 less, they experience the highest
level
 of
stress
 and anxiety in
this
 group.
Business men
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Businessmen
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 are the busiest in
this
 group, working 70
hours
 a
week
.
Moreover
, movie producers stand second in
this
 group working 60
hours
 a
week
 and the doctors who are the next most hardworking individuals, dedicate just over 50
hours
 of their
week
 to
work
.
Furthermore
, writers, programmers, and lawyers
work
 for 45, 40, and 35
hours
 respectively.
Finally
, chefs and
lecturers
 only spend 30 and 25
hours
 of their time busy. Among all these stressful occupations,
lecturers
 experience the most tension at
work
, accounting for 25%. The second most stressful occupation is movie producing, making up 18% and after that being a doctor (15%). Lawyers and writers feel the same
level
 of
stress
, accounting for 8%.
However
, with the long
hours
 of working per
week
,
business men
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businessmen
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 only experience 11% of
stress
. The lowest
level
 of
stress
 goes to programmers, making up 5%. Chefs make up 10% of the whole proportion.
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