The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
The given line graph depicts the average monthly change in prices of three metals (Copper,
Nickel
, Zinc
) during 2014.
Correct word choice
and Zinc
Overall
, it can be seen that Nickel
had the highest price at the start in
January. But it has decreased significantly by twice. Change preposition
of
However
, Copper and Zinc fluctuated.
In January Nickel
started at 7%. Next 5 months it dropped dramatically to -3%. After that
it rose to -1%. Add a comma
that,
Subsequently
was stable until September. Nevertheless
, Nickel
had considerable
growth Correct article usage
a considerable
to
1%.
Change preposition
of
Finally
, Copper had 2% initially
, after it fell to 0.5% in June. Then
, it had an upward trend with a slight change to 1.5% in the end. Zinc had a similar situation. It started at 1%, next month improved rapidly to 3%. But then
, it decreased considerably to -1%. Next
4 months stabilized at -1%. Correct article usage
The next
Then
doubled to 1.5% in November. In December it finished at 2%.Submitted by writingiletschecker on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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