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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of vehicle ownership in the UK between 1971 to 2007.
Overall
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, it is apparent that owning one car
is
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was
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 the most popular in Britain during the whole
period
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 whilst having no car diminished towards the end
opposed
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as opposed
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 to having two cars which rose at the same time.
On the other hand
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, people owning three or more are accounting
the
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for the
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 least
percentage
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 of all. Regarding having one car, it has been a steady trend with tiny fluctuations;
however
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, it ended the
period
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 with the highest
percentage
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 between roughly 44% and 46%. In
similar
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a similar
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 fashion, owning three or more cars has been a stable line but with
a progressive step-by-step increases
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a progressive step-by-step increase
progressive step-by-step increases
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 towards the end of the
period
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, reaching its highest
percentage
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 with around 8% in 2007. Turning to the remaining two, not owning a vehicle started with the highest
percentage
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 with just under 50% and kept declining till the end of the
period
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 with roughly 25%. In opposite, people with two cars started
with
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at
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 8% and
have been growing
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grew
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 during the time frame and ended
with
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at
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 slightly 27%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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