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Some people say economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger, while others say economic growth is damaging the environment and must stop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Increasing governmental income is not to eliminate poverty and hunger,
however
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, the environmental destruction is caused by economic growth.
This
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 essay agrees with
this
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 statement because the factors behind environmental
damaging
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 surpass the reduction of hunger. On one hand, the more governmental
increase
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 occur people say it
reduce
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 the poverty level
at
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 a state.
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 arguing that policymakers could provide the population with high salaries, unlike the
the
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state that
suffer
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 from
finanical
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financial
 issues.
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, there is a specific country that
endure
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from
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doubt that high to pay,
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 the salaries going to be low. The drawbacks going to be huge as it causes an environmental destruction the population would suffer from. If a country
have
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 a high growth it will be flow at factories, to increase their income. Yet factories have many disadvantages,
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 the pollution
it
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 cause ,
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, the sea will be polluted
that
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 factories throw the litter in.
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, the air will be polluted
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 of emissions that
effect
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 the population's health. Numerous academic articles reported that there is a linkage between environmental pollution and health problems that
makes
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 individuals endure their entire
life
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lives
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. These reasons classify that economic growth
have
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 drawbacks that
affects
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 the
populations
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population
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. In conclusion, if the income increased, policymakers could provide
a
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higher salaries for citizens.
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, the environmental issues will be unpredictable
that
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leads
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leading
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 to health issues.

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coherence and cohesion
To achieve a higher score, improve the clarity of expression and argument cohesion. Ensure each paragraph clearly supports your thesis statement.
task achievement
Enhance your task response by more thoughtfully considering and addressing both sides of the argument. It is also advisable to support points with specific, well-defined examples.
task achievement
You have made an effort to discuss both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced approach.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Infrastructural development
  • Social services
  • Quality of life
  • Trickle-down effect
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Industrialization
  • Deforestation
  • Climate change
  • Biodiversity
  • Resource depletion
  • Sustainable growth
  • Renewable energy
  • Wellbeing indices
  • Environmental protection
  • Technological advancements
  • Global responsibility
  • Consumer behavior
  • Green technology
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