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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show the distribution of different means of transport in Edmonton,
while
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 the table illustrates the proportion of motives that encourage
people
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 to
use
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 their
cars
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the car is the most popular mode of transportation, and the majority of
people
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use
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 their
cars
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 for commuting to their workplace. looking at the pie chart, an overwhelming number of
people
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use
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cars
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; nearly two-fifths of
people
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 account for using
cars
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.
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While nearly
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Nearly
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 one-third of them
use
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 the public railway, which is
also
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 the second most popular medium.
However
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, only one-tenth of
people
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 utilize taxis and busses for travelling.
On the other hand
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, most of the residents commute to work using their personal vehicles, with a proportion of 55%, and 40% for taking children to school and business activities, respectively.
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, 15% of them
use
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 it for shopping and leisure time as well.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transportation modes
  • car ownership
  • proportion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • transportation habits
  • environmental awareness
  • government policies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • environmental quality
  • future implications
  • adapt
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