The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts show the distribution of different means of transport in Edmonton,
while
the table illustrates the proportion of motives that encourage people
to use
their cars
.
Overall
, it is clear that
the car is the most popular mode of transportation, and the majority of people
use
their cars
for commuting to their workplace.
looking at the pie chart, an overwhelming number of people
use
cars
; nearly two-fifths of people
account for using cars
. While nearly
one-third of them Correct word choice
Nearly
use
the public railway, which is also
the second most popular medium. However
, only one-tenth of people
utilize taxis and busses for travelling.
On the other hand
, most of the residents commute to work using their personal vehicles, with a proportion of 55%, and 40% for taking children to school and business activities, respectively. Moreover
, 15% of them use
it for shopping and leisure time as well.Submitted by shahroz99dev on
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