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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of people interested in four types of sports in a specific region from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, tennis continued to increase for 20 years in a row,
while
 rugby faced a dramatic decline. Badminton and basketball remained almost unchanged during these periods. Based on the graph, tennis is the only sport that
became
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 more popular over the years. The number of people
practicing
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 tennis rose significantly from 150 to 200 in the first decade,
then
 continued to increase slightly, reaching 220 in 2005.
In contrast
, rugby declined steadily from 1985 to 1995, with the most dramatic decline occurring in the second decade, falling to a quarter of its initial level by 2005. Regarding both badminton and basketball, the number of players remained almost the same over the two decades, except for a slight fluctuation from 1985 to 1995.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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