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The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrıcan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrıcan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the median
temperature
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 of Cairo, Mombasa, and Cape Town throughout the
year
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.
Overall
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, Cairo's
temperature
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 spikes dramatically during some months of the
year
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.
However
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, Cape Town and Mombasa experience limited changes across the
year
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.
According to
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 the graph, Mombasa starts and ends the
year
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 with a
temperature
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 of 80
degrees
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, with a fluctuation in March and April, followed by a decline during the period from mid-April to July. A decrease in Cape Town's
temperature
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 is
also
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 notable. It begins at 70
degrees
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 for two months and
then
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 falls significantly to 55
degrees
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 in July, before returning to almost its previous level in December.
On the other hand
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, Cairo's
temperature
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 rises significantly during the months of February to June, reaching its peak at 82
degrees
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 after a plateau in July, and
finally
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 decreasing to 58
degrees
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 in December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, year, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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