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The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.
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The line graph compares the rate of
people
's choice of attractions who visited Brighton, England for tourism in the years
of
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1980 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
number
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 of
people
 who experienced pier has an increasing trend
while
art
 gallery has a decreasing tendency. First of all, we can see that
pavillion
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the pavillion
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 hit
the
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 highest point in 1995. The percentage had a steep increase from roughly 23% in 1980 to 48% in 1995.
However
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 it had a sharp decline until 2000 rating 35%.
Then
 it slowly decreased to 30% until 2010.
Secondly
,
art
gallery
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galleries
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 had a dramatic change
among
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 10 years. The rate rose from approximately 21% in 1980 to 37% in 1985 and
then
 fell to 20% in 1990.
Then
 it had a smooth decline to 8% in 2010.
Next,
pier
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the pier
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 had an increasing tendency
among
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 the period. The percentage climbed up steadily from 10% in 1980 to nearly 22% in 2010.
Finally
, festivals stayed almost stable at 30%.
Overall
, it is seen that
people
 visiting
art
 galleries decreased
while
people
 going to
pier
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the pier
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 slightly increased in 30 years. Visitors going to
art
 galleries and pavillion fluctuated
widly
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widely
wildly
 during the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, art with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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