The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In
todays
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today's
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era of technology, the
migration
of
workers
has become one of the key problems of any progressive economy.
Due to
lack of opportunities in the workforce, lack of medical availability in the
country
and the security for the family,
people
are moving from one
country
to another.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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some
people
move from one
country
to another in the
expectaion
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expectation
of
better
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a better
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lifestyle and earnings.
Year
on
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after
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year
there
are
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is
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migrants issue
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migrant issues
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happening all over the world
such
as
US
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the US
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, UK, New Zealand and Australia. These countries have
also
imposed
migrants
rule
for stopping
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to stop
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unwanted migrations into the
country
.
However
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these statistics strictly
explains
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explain
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the migrant
workers
per 1000
people
in the countries in 2006. In the
year
of
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apply
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2003 the most
migration
happened in the United States with a record high rate of 577,000 and the rate of the migrant
workers
were
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was
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at the lowest
i.e
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i.e.
2.3 per 1000
people
in 2006.
United
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The United
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Kingdom had the second highest
workers
migration
with a record number of 266,000 with a ratio of 4.4
workers
per 1000
people
in 2006.
Nonetheless
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these figures for
USA
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the USA
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rose to 678,000 over these three years of
time
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the time
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period.
Besides
a plethora of migrations
has
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that have
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been happening in these countries, their economy keeps on growing
year
on
year
.
According to
these
figures
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figures,
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the lowest
migration
happened in New Zealand in 2003
and
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apply
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with a record high working
migrants
per 1000
people
.
Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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the second highest working
migrants
ratio happened in
australia
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Australia
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with 10.7 per 1000
people
in 2006.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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