The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The representation details how
sugar
is obtained by processing
sugar
cane. Looking from an
overall
perspective,
it is clear that
the process consists
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seven steps of various time
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.
In particular
, after being harvested
sugar
canes go through a series of mechanical phases in order to be turned into
sugar
. Going more into detail, farmers wait until the plant is around 12-18 months old before harvesting it. The latter can be done by
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means of two ways, either using specific equipment,
such
as tractors and truck storages
,
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or by hand, thanks to particular gardening knives agriculture manufacturers use to cut the canes. After being collected, the energy produced by the rotation of some gears allows the
sugar
canes to be crushed,
thus
becoming a juice, which is
then
purified using a limestone filter. Once that
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, an evaporator recurs to heat with the aim of transforming the juice into syrup, producing vapour as waste material. Eventually,
sugar
crystals, which were previously separated from the syrup by a centrifuge, are left drying and cooling in a metal container,
thus
resulting in ready-to-use
sugar
that is
packed and sold.
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