The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The representation details how
sugar
is obtained by processing sugar
cane. Looking from an overall
perspective, it is clear that
the process consists in
seven steps of various time Change preposition
of
length
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lengths
In particular
, after being harvested sugar
canes go through a series of mechanical phases in order to be turned into sugar
.
Going more into detail, farmers wait until the plant is around 12-18 months old before harvesting it. The latter can be done by the
means of two ways, either using specific equipment, Correct article usage
apply
such
as tractors and truck storages,
or by hand, thanks to particular gardening knives agriculture manufacturers use to cut the canes.
After being collected, the energy produced by the rotation of some gears allows the Remove the comma
apply
sugar
canes to be crushed, thus
becoming a juice, which is then
purified using a limestone filter. Once that happened
, an evaporator recurs to heat with the aim of transforming the juice into syrup, producing vapour as waste material.
Eventually, Wrong verb form
happens
sugar
crystals, which were previously separated from the syrup by a centrifuge, are left drying and cooling in a metal container, thus
resulting in ready-to-use sugar
that is
packed and sold.Submitted by camilla.balzarotti02 on
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