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The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ehtanol.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ehtanol.
The Below Picture illustrate
that
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how
a
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biofuel is used to make
a
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ethanol
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. There are nine stages of biofuel that
converted
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in
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 different
thing
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things
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manufacture
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the manufacture
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 of
ethanol
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picture
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the picture
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 plants and trees play a vital role in the process of
ethanol
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that
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and
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 they can
direct
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 receive
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sunlight and carbon dioxide
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 the process of photosynthesis.
Futuremore
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Furthermore
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, the human through them
to
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 pre-processing by
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way of
haravesting
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harvesting
. After that pre-processing
brake
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breaks
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 them into pieces to form
a
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cellulose.
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, cellulose
passed
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 from the processing and
convert
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converts
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 them
in
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 the shape of sugars.
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,
microbe
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added
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in
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 the sugar by biological processes and
finally
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 converted
them
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into
ethanol
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Then
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 we use
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 like
as
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cars,aircraft and tractors. In conclusion, the
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vehicle through
the
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carbon dioxide
in
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 the air and
this
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continue
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continues
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recycel
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recycling
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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