City centres are very crowded with cars. They often cause a great deal of pollution. Cars should be banned from all centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
City
midpoint
are very packed with Fix the agreement mistake
midpoints
cars
and those can impacting
on a big deal of air pollution. It is argued that Change the verb form
impact
be impacting
the
Correct article usage
apply
cars
should be banned from all centers
. Change the spelling
centres
This
essay completely agrees with this
view because it can impacted
the citizens' Change the verb form
impact
healths
and can create Fix the agreement mistake
health
loss
in Add an article
a loss
productivity
.
The main reason cars
should prohibited to enter
the Change preposition
from entering
city
center
is Change the spelling
centre
because
they can Replace the word
that
caused
Change the verb form
cause
be caused
the
health issues. Correct article usage
apply
Polution
is identically Correct your spelling
Pollution
with
Change preposition
to
lung's
problems and Change noun form
lung
hence
it will cause the
serious injuries to Correct article usage
apply
people
that
live in Correct pronoun usage
who
especially
hyper-density Add an article
the especially
an especially
city
. Fix the agreement mistake
cities
For example
, in main
Add an article
the main
a main
city
Fix the agreement mistake
cities
such
as Guazhou in China and Jakarta in Indonesia, the people
that Correct quantifier usage
number of people
has
Change the verb form
have
lung's
Change noun form
lung
issue
is rising throughout the year Fix the agreement mistake
issues
due to
cars
that are moving aroung
the Correct your spelling
around
city
daily. As a result
, people
can see the thick fog circling the high rise
building every morning.
Another impact is Add a hyphen
high-rise
cars
can create loss
in Add an article
a loss
productivity
due to
rising
Correct article usage
the rising
sick
Correct quantifier usage
number of sick
people
because of the polution
and traffic Correct your spelling
pollution
jam
that can Fix the agreement mistake
jams
last
in
more than 3 hours. With massive Change preposition
apply
cars
and people
who use it
in the Correct pronoun usage
them
city
, every rush hour or after office hour, it can create the
traffic jam and Correct article usage
a
impacting
the Wrong verb form
impact
people
who can arrive early in the office. For example
, if the working hours start from 9 am, they should drive from their home from 7 am because most people
who work in the city
live outside of the area because the rent price tend
to Change the verb form
tends
higher
in the Add a missing verb
be higher
city
center
. Change the spelling
centre
This
can create the
Correct article usage
a
lost
of Replace the word
loss
productivity
in 2 hours just for driving and got
stuck Wrong verb form
getting
on
Change preposition
in
the
traffic jam.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
a
cars
should be prohibited in the middle point of a city
because it
can create Correct pronoun usage
they
health
impact and Correct article usage
a health
Correct your spelling
decreasing
decresing
Correct your spelling
decrease
people
's productivity
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task achievement
Ensure consistency in grammar and verb tenses. Strengthen the argument by elaborating more on the potential solutions after banning cars and how it will benefit different demographic groups.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure and eliminate grammatical mistakes to improve clarity. For instance, phrases like 'they can caused' and 'can create lost of productivity' need to be corrected. Make sure to use proper conjunctions for better flow.
task achievement
The essay clearly states the position on the topic in the introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
The use of specific examples, like the mention of Guangzhou and Jakarta, helps in supporting the main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure with identifiable points and a clear progression of ideas from one paragraph to another.
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