Nowadays many people prefer to shop in supermarkets rather than small shops or local markets? Is this positive or negative for development? Discuss and give your opinion.
It is often argued that there are many
people
who see shopping in supermarkets
better
than local markets or small Change preposition
as better
shops
. For me, I prefer shopping in the supermarket for many reasons. In this
essay, I will discuss both people
opinion's
.
Change the noun form
opinions
opinion
First,
people
who say shopping in supermarkets
are better than small shops
have many reasons and actually, I am one of them. For example
, there are many people
who like open spaces
and want to enjoy their time there. There is a study about what human loves in small or big spaces
, they study 1000 brain
and the result is most of them favour huge Fix the agreement mistake
brains
spaces
. So it is good for the owner to have many people
in his supermarket, also
, he will get a lot of money if he knows what the customer prefer
. Change the verb form
prefers
In addition
, if the customer like the supermarkets
the owner will have more money then
it will be considered a development for the country.
On the other side. People
who prefer small shops
or local markets have different reasons. For example
, there are people
who want everything fast, they do not want to move the whole supermarket just to take only one thing. Furthermore
, it is not considered a development because owners who build small shops
do not get as much as supermarkets
.
In conclusion. In my point of view, I see that supermarkets
benefits
Correct subject-verb agreement
benefit
are
more than local Unnecessary verb
apply
shops
and small shops
benefit, also
, for the country's development it is better to have more supermarkets
than have small shops
everywhere because people
love to have huge spaces
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complete response
Ensure you discuss both views in more depth. While you provided arguments for both sides, they were somewhat limited and need more development.
logical structure
Improve the coherence and clarity of your arguments. For instance, explain the connection between enjoying open spaces and preferring supermarkets more clearly.
relevant specific examples
Expand on your examples. For instance, instead of broadly saying 'there is a study about what human loves in small or big spaces,' provide more specific details about the study’s findings.
introduction conclusion present
The essay clearly starts with an introduction and ends with a conclusion, providing a structured format.
clear comprehensive ideas
You've provided arguments from both perspectives, which shows a balanced approach.