Nowadays many people prefer to shop in supermarkets rather than small shops or local markets? Is this positive or negative for development? Discuss and give your opinion.

It is often argued that there are many
people
who see shopping in
supermarkets
better
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as better
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than local markets or small
shops
. For me, I prefer shopping in the supermarket for many reasons. In
this
essay, I will discuss both
people
opinion's
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.
First,
people
who say shopping in
supermarkets
are better than small
shops
have many reasons and actually, I am one of them.
For example
, there are many
people
who like open
spaces
and want to enjoy their time there. There is a study about what human loves in small or big
spaces
, they study 1000
brain
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and the result is most of them favour huge
spaces
. So it is good for the owner to have many
people
in his supermarket,
also
, he will get a lot of money if he knows what the customer
prefer
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.
In addition
, if the customer like the
supermarkets
the owner will have more money
then
it will be considered a development for the country. On the other side.
People
who prefer small
shops
or local markets have different reasons.
For example
, there are
people
who want everything fast, they do not want to move the whole supermarket just to take only one thing.
Furthermore
, it is not considered a development because owners who build small
shops
do not get as much as
supermarkets
. In conclusion. In my point of view, I see that
supermarkets
benefits
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are
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more than local
shops
and small
shops
benefit,
also
, for the country's development it is better to have more
supermarkets
than have small
shops
everywhere because
people
love to have huge
spaces
.
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complete response
Ensure you discuss both views in more depth. While you provided arguments for both sides, they were somewhat limited and need more development.
logical structure
Improve the coherence and clarity of your arguments. For instance, explain the connection between enjoying open spaces and preferring supermarkets more clearly.
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Expand on your examples. For instance, instead of broadly saying 'there is a study about what human loves in small or big spaces,' provide more specific details about the study’s findings.
introduction conclusion present
The essay clearly starts with an introduction and ends with a conclusion, providing a structured format.
clear comprehensive ideas
You've provided arguments from both perspectives, which shows a balanced approach.

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