Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

It cannot be denied that human
being
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beings
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cannot survive without
water
under the sun.In
modern
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the modern
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epoch fullfill the
needs
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need
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of
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for
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water
has become
global
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a global
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problem in some
area
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areas
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there are
number
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a number
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of causes behind
this
as well as
there are some
suggestion
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suggestions
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which can prove fruitful
to solve
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in solving
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this
issue.
To begin
with,in
present
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era,
majority
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the majority
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of people
use
water
unlimited
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apply
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they have
not
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no
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fear
about
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that
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we can get
confront
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confronted
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mence of
lack
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a lack
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of
water
.Apart from
it
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this
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,there are some crops in
india
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India
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which need to high amount of
water
due to
this
masses
use
more
water
.
Hence
, the
water
is going
fall
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down
in
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to
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the earth.
furthermore
,the main problem
take birth
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because
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that
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most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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are cutting trees because of
this
there is
lack
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a lack
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of seasonal
rain
.
sometime
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sometimes
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land
become
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becomes
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dry. As every lock has
key
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a key
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similarly
there are some
solution
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solutions
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to tackle
this
issue.
firstly
,
Government
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the Government
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should organize
program
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programs
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to aware masses about
value
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the value
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of
water
.Another thing is,people
also
should grow more plants which
also
prove
benificial
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beneficial
for
rain
.If there
will
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is
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rain
and
weather
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the weather
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will
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is
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cold
then
there will
less
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be less
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need
of
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to
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use
alternative sources of
water
as well
as
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and
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we can
also
save
rain
water
after
purify
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purification
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.
government
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The government
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also
should introduce
gadget
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gadgets
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which purify
water
and make
water
to
use
again. Hammering the final nail,it can be concluded that
although
fresh
water
has become
global
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a global
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problem
but
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this
issue can be solved with
joint
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the joint
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hands of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
as well as
individuals.
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