The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The graphs show data on the numbers of

people

who took part in activities venues in 2009 and

also

the costs for those venues in that year. In general, participants who joined

sports

had the lowest number, but the prices for that were the most expensive.

By contrast

people

who went to cinemas reached the highest point,

while

the money they paid for 1 ticket was the cheapest. It is clearly seen that in 2009, attendance in

sports

hit a low of around 170 thousand,

whereas

people

enjoying theme parks were twice as high as in

sports

. And

people

enjoyed movies reached a peak of about 1050

people

However

, the prices for going to cinemas were just $15 for a person and $55 for a family, including 4

people

while

for

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apply

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theme parks were nearly 4 times as much as cinemas. But depending on

sports

, there were different prices, from $24 to a maximum

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of $

show examples

75 for one person in that year.

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The idea of going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home beause of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in different culture.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People learn things better from those at their own level—such as fellow students or co-workers—than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Investor are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do yo agree with this statement? Give reason and include any relevant example based on your own knowlegde.

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