The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The supplied graph illustrates the proportion of city residents
about
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in
coffee
and tea
buying and drinking habits.
In overview, the people
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number of people
went
to a cafe for Correct pronoun usage
who went
coffee
or tea
in last
4 weeks is around 65% in Correct article usage
the last
sydney
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Sydney
melbourne
and Change the capitalization
Melbourne
hobart
, Change the capitalization
Hobart
While
, around 35% of citizens bought fresh coffee
in last
4 weeks.
Generally speaking, in Correct article usage
the last
sydney
above 60% of local citizens went to enjoy Change the capitalization
Sydney
coffee
or tea
in previous
4 weeks, in which around 45% of residents bought fresh & instant Correct article usage
the previous
coffee
. In contrast
, this
ratio is almost same
in Correct article usage
the same
melbourne
, just a fractional change can be seen. Change the capitalization
Melbourne
On the contrary
, in brisbane
and Change the capitalization
Brisbane
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Adelaide
adelaide
almost Add a comma
adelaide,
same
amount of people bought fresh Correct article usage
the same
coffee
. The city in which the ratio of peoples
went to shops for Fix the agreement mistake
people
coffee
and tea
in latest
month is lower than others is Add an article
a latest
the latest
adelaide
. Change the capitalization
Adelaide
Lastly
, in hobrat
, more than half residents go to Correct your spelling
Hobart
resturants
.Correct your spelling
restaurants
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