The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The supplied graph illustrates the proportion of city residents

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coffee

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tea

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buying and drinking habits. In overview, the

people

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went

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tea

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4 weeks is around 65% in

sydney

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melbourne

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hobart

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, around 35% of citizens bought fresh

coffee

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last

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4 weeks. Generally speaking, in

sydney

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above 60% of local citizens went to enjoy

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tea

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4 weeks, in which around 45% of residents bought fresh & instant

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melbourne

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, just a fractional change can be seen.

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adelaide

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amount of people bought fresh

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. The city in which the ratio of

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went to shops for

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latest

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month is lower than others is

adelaide

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hobrat

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Hobart

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resturants

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restaurants

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

148 words

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What problems does this cause? Can you suggest some solutions to this issue?

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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. What are the primary causes of the quality in life?What solutions can you suggest to improve the quality in life?