The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the number of mobile phones purchased from 5 celebrated brands from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Nokia
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and Samsung
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the most popular types of phones used.
Furthermore
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, the
sales
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of Samsung and Apple increased and
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was true for
Nokia
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and LG over
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time.
However
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,
sales
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of
Nokia
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placed first in 2009 with a record of around 440
million
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while
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apple
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Apple
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recorded the
least
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lowest
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with a figure of 10
million
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. Samsung phones
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significantly sold from approximately 240
million
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in 2009 to over 400
million
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in 2013.
Similarly
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, Apple followed the same trend and
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to a value of exactly 150
million
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in 2013.
In contrast
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,
Nokia
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and LG followed a dramatic decline
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in
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sales
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starting from 440
million
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and 120
million
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and
dropped
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dropping
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to 250
million
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and 80
million
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respectively.
Moreover
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, ZTE followed a slight incline in
sales
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and reached 50
million
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starting from 40
million
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.
Submitted by Witharana Senesh Rasinda Wickramasinghe on

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nokia, sales, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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