The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.
The line chart
ilustrates
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illustrates
the number of participating
students
in
UK
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the UK
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chose
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who chose
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to take part in several types of sports during a ten-year period from 2001 to 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were four different types of sports including running,
basketball
, swimming and football. Football accounted for the highest participation in all over
years
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the years
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shown.
Whereas
,
basketball
became the lowest number of
players
at the
and
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end
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of
year
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the year
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. Football
players
had a small
increased
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increase
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from roughly 60
students
in 2001 to
slighly
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slightly
below 70 participants in 2011.
By contrast
, running rose considerably by around 20
students
in 2001 to about 60 in 2011 or increased almost threefold over ten
year
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years
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.
While
,
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apply
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running attracted many
players
in the first five-year which was from only about 20
students
in 2001 to
approimately
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approximately
50
students
in 2005 and 2006.
This
condition
then
fell back to
the
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a
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similar position with the initial year in 2011. In 2001,
basketball
became the second largest of
players
in
UK
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the UK
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. More than 50
students
contributed
in
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to
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this
sport. By 2006,
basketball
reached a peak
to
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of
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slightly over
than
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apply
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60
participation
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participants
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before
dropped
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dropping
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significanty
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significantly
to only 20 in 2008. During three years after 2008, there was no
a
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apply
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rise or
a
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apply
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fall
of
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in
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this
kind of
sports
Fix the agreement mistake
sport
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, basketball, players with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • gender distribution
  • new entrants
  • drop in participation
  • continuation/discontinuation
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