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Human society has made great technological progress in the last 100 years. Some people think this also has negative effects on our life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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lot
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 of changes in the
technology
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last
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this
 innovation
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negatively impact
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impact
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impacts
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negative
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in
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our community.
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 me, the benefits of
technology
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surpass
from
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its drawbacks.
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 the pessimistic of innovation
for instance
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usage
 of mobile phones.
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,
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you
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 that the useful of
technology
 nowadays
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must play a vital role in
ourlife
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our life
your life
. Because recently everything you want to become easy you must use
a
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 item related to
technology
.
Technology
play
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 a vital role in our community that
then
 can do anything like
human
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humans
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.
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, a reboot is
a
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equipment made by
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a human
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 but the output of
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 is like most accurate
then
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than
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human
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the human
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 must have stress the can
be
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fell
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feel
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fatigue
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 human didn't work 24 hours but
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have
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 no stress and the ability to do
workout
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work
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 for 24 hours without break. In short
from
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the researcher
make
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makes
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a
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life easy day by day and it will be more enjoyable in future.
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, they
has
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 some disadvantages like the innovation of mobile, tablet and
games
. If we see that a lot of teenagers use their mobile
every
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the
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 time and don't
focuse
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focus
 on
the
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their
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 study.
Also
a
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apply
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games
is
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are
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most
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the biggest
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problems
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problem
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 thing for
family how
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families
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 to restrict their children
for
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from
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games
 because the younger
play
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ones play
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a
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apply
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games
everyday
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 and waste
a
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expensive time.
In
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the
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a
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 result
the
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they
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becomes
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 lazy they
didn't
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don't
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 want
a
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physical activity and
also
 face a different variety of diseases like blood pressure, cancer and diabetes. In conclusion, the
postive
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positive
 effect of
the
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apply
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technology
 is more
then
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than
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negativity
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negative
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.
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,
its
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it
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depend
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depends
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 on
your
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apply
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how you use
thier
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their
technology
.
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